I did. I just read the story. Making me reader number 12, I guess. I could tell you why it didn't fly -- but you'd have to pay me for it, since editing is what I do for a living.

That being said, what I do want to say, because I enjoy your work, is that this piece needs to be trimmed and focused. There's a terrific, fun story in your taking your toddler to the art museum and introducing her to art via a Rauschberg show -- and your buying those squares. But you've cluttered it up with too many digressions and information dumps about stuff that might be interesting about Bob but which isn't really about this story.

Also, those of us who know about Bob have already heard those stories many times -- so what would make this tale more fun for us is to focus in on you and your kid experiencing his art.

So -- who's your target audience? This piece reads in part like an Intro to BR's art and part like a cool story about your own encounter with this particular show.

If we were doing a rewrite, I'd recommend that you only share as much about BR as a reader needs to understand what his art is like and focus in on your own unique experience.

Not that you asked me.